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Alone by ~wanderer1289:iconwanderer1289:

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There is no one here to share my pain
No one here to help my brain
All alone in the darkness
Stuck inside a frozen bliss

Outside a frozen hell
Gleams with uncertain smell
As a new mist drifts through the air
And not a soul near me cares

Two small pricks of red glow
Standing out among the snow
Edge closer as I stand and watch
Them not even bothered by the ticking clock

They make their way and stop near me
Glancing through the window they see
My own eyes open wide
Looking at his fuzzy hide

He finnaly decides to break the stare
And turns so smooth that not one hair
Turns out of place in the windless night
He walks away not in flight
But only to have a peaceful night.
©2004-2009 ~wanderer1289
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well
i have no idea what this is

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~harry99645 Oct 1, 2004, 9:19:20 PM
Nice :) I see a grammar error and maybe a spelling one or too, but it's a very good poem ^^;

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~wanderer1289 Oct 1, 2004, 9:22:02 PM
what
tell me where

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~harry99645 Oct 1, 2004, 9:24:17 PM
You use the wrong 'there' =p it should be their, I think that finally is mispelled(I'm just remembering these, not actually looking) and there may be another... but I don't think so.

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~ace-of-finland Oct 2, 2004, 6:10:20 AM
:giggle:chris,
you wrote "two" wrong ;)
=P

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~ace-of-finland Oct 2, 2004, 6:12:29 AM
i like this poem :)
i think the beginning of this poem is funny (don't worry. it is just me) :rofl:

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- Olisi ikävä, jos maailma särkyisi... Se on niin kaunis.
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=musicguy Oct 2, 2004, 9:26:08 PM
you aren't alone! And there isnt anymroe snow! :'( It all went away! NOOOOOOOOOOOOooooo. I like this poem though. Nicely written.

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~wanderer1289 Oct 5, 2004, 4:36:54 PM
omg i did that wrong
how could i bad holly

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~wanderer1289 Oct 5, 2004, 4:39:07 PM
i always feel alone at home
its home that makes me feel soo bad
i dun know why though
im like always cared for and i have good parents
i think i just have problems

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